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Post by Chiyuki Sat Sep 26, 2009 8:28 am

Just in case someone has read my new story Chatter Bones, I was hoping to get feedback and opinions on the first chapter. I'm currently working on the second chapter and I'm open to any comments or critisism.
Thanks ^^
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Post by Lord Zombie Mon Sep 28, 2009 9:26 pm

Well just a minor note....you sorta misspelled Zorback I'm pretty sure it's Zorbak instead..as for the story itself it's nice..but it's too soon to judge it really, seeing how things will probably change as far the writing style goes..or at least I assume it will probably happen..so until you make more chapters to judge as a whole.. I'll reserve any real judgement on it..
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Post by Banned Mon Sep 28, 2009 9:45 pm

Its good... so far im kinda reading it right now :P
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Post by Erik Tue Sep 29, 2009 4:16 am

Yes LiZ, it is Zorbak, the tiny moglin necromancer :P
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Post by Flaw of Insanity Tue Sep 29, 2009 5:00 am

Chi... amazing.
You used amazing imagery to describe the bar...
You made it seem realistic (for a AQW story)
And it is put together amazingly.

Keep it up, or else...
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Post by Banned Tue Sep 29, 2009 6:50 am

Im pretty much done with writing... but its good to see excellent writers like yourself in this clan.


And of course Charon... even though he logged off before i could get his picture and i had to spend 2 hours finding someone with vampire and enough money to look like Charon but thats besides the point.
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Post by Dai Tue Sep 29, 2009 12:50 pm

One word describes it all... Epic.
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Post by Chiyuki Tue Sep 29, 2009 9:59 pm

wow guys thanks! thanks zman for the spelling correction too. I'll fix that right away.
I'm hoping to put chapter two up either today or on the weekend.
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Post by Banned Wed Sep 30, 2009 7:18 am

Cant wait :D
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Post by Chiyuki Thu Oct 08, 2009 7:01 am

Chapter Two is up and Chapter Three is a work in progress!
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Post by Lord Zombie Thu Oct 08, 2009 11:46 am

Wow that's quite the improvement from Chapter 1...very nice work...look forward to the chapters to come..and what becomes of the demonic warrior..
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Post by Chiyuki Thu Oct 22, 2009 6:33 am

chapter three's almost done...just finishing up the the editing
I should be posting it up soon
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Post by Chiyuki Wed Dec 16, 2009 5:54 am

okay sorry about not posting anything for awhile
I haven't been on in ages because school is eating my life :(
*is sad*
but I will be done with final exams this week so I shouldn't have any reason not to be online then
and hopefully I can get the next couple of chapters up on here
though I doubt anyone was bothering to read this....well I'll post up anyway
so sorry for the absence
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