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After Chaos: Stories by Wixmagic Discussion/Comments

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Post by Wixmagic Wed Jul 21, 2010 1:26 am

I changed the name of my word gallery, and added the story WIP Cybernetic Crusade. At the 'suggestion' of Pere I made this thread.

Please tell me what you think about my stories.

Any and all CC is appreciated

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Post by Peregrine Wed Jul 21, 2010 2:03 am

Not bad. Not bad at all. I think you should work on punctuation though. Comma and paragraph use especially. The storytelling would be a lot more effective if your formatting was a bit more refined.
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