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Mash's Poems (Discussion, Suggestions on what to do my next ones on, What do they mean?)

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Post by Mash Sun Jun 14, 2009 12:01 pm

All my poems can be found on my word gallery thread. I'm having a hard time thinking up a theme for my next batch, so suggestions would be nice. Also, feel free to guess what my poems mean. Really. There's no wrong answer.
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Post by frogboy Sun Jun 21, 2009 11:21 am

how bout u do ur next set on frogs! FTW
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Post by Pyronix Sun Jun 21, 2009 7:55 pm

Well, most the trick about making poetry is partly about writing about interesting subjects.


For instance, why write about inspiration it self?

Compare it to a delicate light constantly fluttering in the wind, gorgeous glowing lights a wash with a strange beauty all its own.

Theirs lots of things you can write about really, just think out side the box.


like writing about writers block. Poems don't always have to have a solid subject, just keep that in mind.
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Post by Mash Sun Jun 21, 2009 10:33 pm

Thanks. And I know what you mean. I've done that a lot, like in this:
"Just a white canvas
And the only way to fill it is to paint
Paint the black in
Because white is the absence of color
The absence of existence
And only you can fill it
Even with black
Even with things you'd rather not remember"
I usually try to fool the reader into thinking what they're reading is something else than what the poem is about. An example is Silver (a poem I wrote), which isn't really about silver at all. I really enjoy doing abstract poetry, and I've done it multiple times. Thanks for the suggestion. :)
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Post by Pyronix Mon Jun 22, 2009 8:54 am

Sorry, I really haven't had time to read through everything yet, but I promise I will. XD


I love you works, they really are works of art in my opinion. I also love how you don't always write about depressing things, mots of the people I know who write poems are always writing about death and destruction, its rare to see good works on creativity and life. The only advice left I would give is to keep pushing to make you're poems and writings better, even if you think its perfect. Also get out of the house as much as possible, increases you're chances of getting inspiration in life.

I have to give you props man.


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Post by Mash Mon Jun 22, 2009 9:43 am

Wow. Thanks. I've never gotten too much attention for my writing before, so this is really, really nice. I really wish more people would look into the word gallery as often as they look into the art gallery.
I read your poem, and I like it. You should really continue to write poems, stories, etc. It's be interesting to see someone else's work.
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Post by Charon Mon Jun 22, 2009 10:24 am

Hey again Mash.

I really like your poems. I'm not usually a poetry reader, but yours is better than a lot of poems I've read. I love the subjects, your style, and your word choice. I'm having a hard time finding anything to criticize. If I think of something, I will let you know, but as of now, these are all great.

Once again, good work!
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Post by Mash Tue Jun 23, 2009 3:44 am

Thanks. I'm done with "The Abstract and the Hyperbole" (my recent collection of poems, when put in a certain order can mean something. They all share similiar topics, and represent an era in time of my poetry.) I'm moving on to my next collection, including The Groove and Machinator, both which I've added. I have more influence than ever, thanks to thanks to the positive feedback.
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Post by Mash Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:20 pm

I have to add my next poem, "The Dark: Snow and Fog."
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Post by Charon Thu Jul 23, 2009 2:53 am

/jawdrop

Mash, Abiogenesis is amazing. My favorite so far. I would love to see it made into a song.
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Post by Mash Thu Jul 23, 2009 4:38 am

Thanks. :-D

It's not that good.
Still, I'm proud of it. I have a lot of other poems on my DeviantArt (can go there be clicking the globe under my Avi)
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Post by Charon Thu Jul 23, 2009 5:12 am

It is that good.
The repititions, the rhymes, the rhythm. They all fit together so well.
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Post by Mash Fri Aug 07, 2009 9:26 am

"No." has been added.
Strip away the inspiration I got from songs, and you have a very personal poem.
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Post by Charon Fri Aug 07, 2009 9:36 am

Another poem that I would love to see put into song. I love it, Mash. I'v tried poetry before, so I know that it's not easy. You've got skills. :3
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Post by Mash Fri Aug 14, 2009 8:13 am

Thank-you for the support, Char-Bear. I just added Half Empty; this is one of the best I've ever done.
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Post by Rage Fri Aug 14, 2009 9:08 am

I have to agree with Charon, I definitely like your work.
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